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 A Dark Music Dedication 
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Manisha
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I think i was a bit insane when i wrote this and it is not, by any means, a very good piece of poetry, nor does it do justice to the topic. But it was an attempt and since we were discussing our dislike of bad poetry in the Pet Peeves Section, i just thought i could give something to add on. Enjoy or Dispise, the choice is yours.


A Dark Music Dedication

Is The Cure A Forest within me?
Will Bauhaus make the white go away?
Will this Storm called life end
In a dramatic Theatre of Tragedy
Or can a Joy Division save the soul
That My Lost Lenore tainted with Shadowplay?

Inkubus Sukkubus your Enchantment takes us to Hel
For you know We Belong With The Dead
Due to the Alien Sex Fiend
that from the heaven’s fell
I now know The Haunting controls
The Voices In My Head

Oh Christian Death! Hear this Romeo’s Distress
As I struggle and fight to Stand My Ground
For Within Temptation,
Our Solemn Hour is duress
As Voltaire leads us to a Graveyard Picnic
That is held On Gothic Ground

The Black Goddess Rises with darkened peace
Upon a tainted Cradle Of Filth and hate
With Epica’s Phantom Agony cry
for the Lost and Damned of Kamelot’s release
While a Chord Of Souls take us to
the Fields Of The Nephilim- our fate

So Kiss Me, Kiss Me, Kiss me, with Type O Negative
Bloody kisses From Dusk Till Dawn
With the Strange love metal lord of His Infernal Majesty
looking on in Endless Dark with a Vampire Heart
As The 69 Eyes look on, look on
Waiting for Anesthesia to kick in so Love Can Tare Us Apart

And while Lacuna Coil leaves me Spellbound with her lies
I will take 12 Black Rainbows Straight to the Light
Where Dead Souls and Lost Boys go
When the Stargazer leaves Cities in Dust and decides that Everything Dies
Where we find that all Dead Can Dance as we Paint It Black
and Ever Dream of the Never Land called Night

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Mon Feb 08, 2010 9:38 pm
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Lovely :-)

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 12:33 am
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*claps* Nicely done!

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 11:37 am
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Insanity is good! I love this poem... It takes a LOT of work to be able to weave in so many elements successfully without the whole thing falling apart and becoming a pointless mush... This is awesome!!! :D


Mon Feb 07, 2011 11:38 pm
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Post Re: A Dark Music Dedication
Very cleverly done! I like your ABCADB rhyme scheme. Is there a reason why your 5th stanza broke from the pattern, though?

-- Nephele


Tue Feb 08, 2011 3:29 am
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Thank you all for the kind words on this poem. I've always been very critical of this one.

Nephele wrote:
Very cleverly done! I like your ABCADB rhyme scheme. Is there a reason why your 5th stanza broke from the pattern, though?

-- Nephele


No other reason than extremely ill planning on my part and an unease to change my wording....

And this is a very old version of the poem. Here is a newer version. Not sure which I like better. Goth Points to any and all who gets all the references? (not that there hard.)

Newer Version:

Is The Cure A Forest within me?
Will Bauhaus make the White Go Away?
Will this Violent World end
In a dramatic Theatre of Tragedy
Or can a Joy Division Silence the soul
That My Lost Lenore tainted with Shadowplay?

Inkubus Sukkubus your Enchantment takes us to Hel
For you know We Belong With The Dead
Due to the Alien Sex Fiend
That from the 45 Graves came and fell
I now know The Sleeper controls
The Jabberwocky in my head

Oh Christian Death! Hear this Romeo’s Distress
No-One is There as I become a Fatal Tragedy
For Within Temptation,
Our Solemn Hour, Alone, is Duress
While Voltaire leads us to a Graveyard Picnic
Held on the black flowers of the Sea

Your Best Nightmare rises with Bloody Tears
Upon the Hallowed Hills within London After Midnight
As the Killing Joke guards their Primitive Hate
For those Buried Alive in Persephone’s fears
While a Chord Of Souls take us to
the Fields Of The Nephilim- our fate

So lead me to Disintegration with Type O Negative
Bloody Kisses from Dusk Till Dawn
While the Strange Kind Of Love metal lord of His Infernal Majesty
Hiding in Endless Dark with a Vampire Heart
As The 69 Eyes watch as the Devils looks on
Waiting for Anesthesia to kick in so Love Can Tare Us Apart

And while Siouxsie Sioux leaves me Spellbound with her Lies
I will take 12 Black Rainbows Straight to the Light
Where Dead Souls and Lost Boys go
When the Stargazer leaves Cities in Dust and decides that Everything Dies
Where we find that all Dead Can Dance as we Paint It Black
And Ever Dream of the Never Land called Night.

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Tue Feb 08, 2011 2:07 pm
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Midieval Fantasy wrote:
Thank you all for the kind words on this poem. I've always been very critical of this one.

Nephele wrote:
Very cleverly done! I like your ABCADB rhyme scheme. Is there a reason why your 5th stanza broke from the pattern, though?

-- Nephele


No other reason than extremely ill planning on my part and an unease to change my wording....


Well, it doesn't have to follow the pattern. But I was just curious.

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And this is a very old version of the poem. Here is a newer version. Not sure which I like better. Goth Points to any and all who gets all the references? (not that there hard.)


Not hard -- but a very clever and creative way of presenting a "recommended listening" list! Me likee. :)

-- Nephele


Tue Feb 08, 2011 2:41 pm
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Thanks Nephele!

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Midi, I love both versions... don't ask, but somehow I expected you to renew it...

as to Nephele's comment of a good tracklist, may I ask permission to add and ending sentence?

"yes, Ich bin ein wahrer Satan"

sorry, I love that song as much as Small Talk Stinks by Bauhaus...

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 2:47 pm
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I love it. Consider it added!

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I love it. Its a good way of giving a playlist.

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Love it love it love it


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Thank you, Dante. I am glad you enjoyed it.

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Nice.

I'll have to finish listening to these tonight. :)

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